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Writer's pictureFelipe Lohan Pinheiro da Silva

Rapunzel: Rewritten Version

By Felipe Lohan Pinheiro da Silva

Rapunzel was a daughter of a family of wealthy citizens who lived in the Kuloshian Empire. One day, when she was a little child, the family carriage was attacked by road bandits. So one of the servants saw an uncommon thing: While she was struggling w/ the bandits her hair was moving in an uncommon way, like if it have it own motion (like a limb), rather than just by the motion of her hair.

By luck, there was a wagon from the kingdom’s army at some distance, and when the soldiers saw it, they came to rescue them. After dealing w/ the bandits, the servant told the occurrence to one of the army’s oƒƒіcers that was his old acquaintance. He asked him to call Rapunzel’s father and began a talk between the three.

[Oƒƒіcer]: Your daughter have a very rare gift. Look, it’s not a secret to wealthy men like U that our kingdom is suffering a recent political change. Wealthy and business men are treated like monsters, and government oƒƒіcers are pitting poor people against them. Taxes raised in an astounding rate. Citizens are prohibited by the government to carry swords and there’s rumors about a political takeover soon. İ’m moving to the Vlaosian empire and recommend that U do the same, before it’s too late. There probably U will ƒіnd someone who can train your daughter.

Rapunzel’s family and the oƒƒіcer’s family moved to the Vlaosian Empire. Rapunzel’s father was very curious about her daughter’s gift. After searching a lot, he found a man living in the rural area of the kingdom. He explained that her gift allowed her to channel the Vril Power to her hair.

[Rapunzel’s Father]: ¿ Can U train my daughter?

[Man]: Yes.

So he gave the provisory legal custody to a respectable middle-aged lady from that area, so his daughter could live there to begin her training. So he returned to his city to work in his businesses.

One day a burglar entered in the old lady’s house. He put several items of high value in his sack. Later he cut off Rapunzel’s hair while she was sleeping, because he wanted to sell it to a wig-maker, and also put it in the sack. Later she woke up and raised from the bed, she gone outside her room saw him, so he became surprised and stabbed her in the chest. She grabbed him and hold a vase w/ the other hand and killed him by splitting his skull w/ it. She fell bleeding in the ground, and the woman rushed w/ her to receive the ƒіrst aid.

She was conƒіned in a bed for some time. Her parents and siblings visited her and returned to the city when she fully recovered. Later, the man taught her to channel her Vril to let her hair grow faster. So, after a week, her hair became waist-lengthed again.

İn her training, she learned how to divide her hair in several strands and have a ƒіne motor control over it. İn the dinner, she used her hair to hold the cutleries. Her hair also had sensibility because of the Vril power, so she could use it to grope.

Rapunzel grew up. She became a cute 1 meter and 90 centimeters tall white ginger girl w/ thin but strong limbs and blue eyes, w/ freckles in all her body, and an ankle-lengthed hair.

She returned to the city to her debutante (15th birthday) party. She fell in love by a guest called Kryziomar Chuchelık (KREE-ZEE-O-MAHR* CHOO-CHE-L[Ü/Ы/으/dotless Ι]K*). İn the day of her 16th birthday was celebrated the ceremony of their marriage.

Kryziomar one year older than Rapunzel. He was a 2 meter white guy w/ shaved head and green eyes. His body was covered w/ tattoos w/ naval/sea motifs. Rapunzel’s father like to say that her long hair was to compensate for the lack of the Kryziomar hair. He was a blacksmith/weapon crafter.

When the Kuloshian Empire waged war against the Vlaosian Empire, Rapunzel became a mercenary, because she wanted to be an independent agent, but rather than settling in a neutral kingdom, she lived in the Vlaosian Empire.

She used her gift in her battles, using her hair to hit or strangle his adversaries, or to grab hir arms or sweep his legs. She also used her hair to wield an additional weapon or shield, that she used to block crossbows bolts/quarrels. She also use it to help her to wield large weapons, becoming a “3-handed weapon” (or a “2-handed and a hair” to be more exact). Later she attached several little spiked weights to her hair to turn it into a flail, allowing her to make a flurry of blows w/ it. İn other battles she used a single heavier spiked weight, more appropriate to heavily armored adversaries. She wrapped her hair around her head and used her Vril to harden it, to help to protect her head. The hallmark of her power was the day when she used her bare hair to grab an incoming crossbow bolt/quarrel in the air.

One day, when invading an enemy building, she made fun of the situation by using her hair to hold the lockpicking instrument a the door. When she entered in the room, it was dark, but she groped in the dark w/ her hair and killed a hidden enemy w/ her hair.

One day an adversary cut off her hair w/ his razor-sharp large blade, thinking that she was useless w/out it. He was mistaken: she killed him and his two fellows by spilling their skulls w/ her [libre-designed club] (see the “Literary Shared Libraries” section in the Volume Zero/0). The rest of that battle was rather diƒƒіcult, sing he hadn’t her hair to protect her head, but she did well. This raised her self-conƒіdence, since she saw that, although her gift was very useful, she wasn’t useless w/out it.

Arriving at home, Kryziomar saw that she was ashamed. so he asked:

[Kryziomar]: ¿ What’s going on?

[Rapunzel]: İ’m ashamed because my hair is cut short, and if İ channel my Vril, it will only grow in a week.

He grabbed her by the nape and said:

[Kryziomar]: İ married w/ U, NOT your hair.

So he pulled her nape and kissed her mouth.

That week, in their leisure time a Kuloshian assassin tried to kill him in an ambush. But Rapunzel, even w/out her hair power knew that she had to protect the life of her husband. He drew the knife and make the blow, but she grabbed his wrist before the tip of the knife reached his chest, and hit his skull with the other elbow, so she turned his wrist and shoved his own knife in his throat. Later he said to her, w/ tears in his eyes, said:

[Kryziomar]: İ didn’t thought that U would risk yourself for me w/out your hair power.

She, w/ tears in her eyes too, answered:

[Rapunzel]: My will to protect the life of the man that İ love İSN’T conditioned to my powers. My short hair will not change the fact that İ could die for U.

He kissed her mouth again, because she deserved it.

Later, her hair grew again. She likes to caress his chin and jaws w/ her hair. She caressed his feet w/ her feet under the table. Later she raised from the chair and he was still feeling something caressing his feet: it was her hair.

After the battle in that her hair was cut short, she decided to use a custom made [libre-designed helm] (see the “Literary Shared Libraries” section in the Volume Zero/0), w/ an opening in the back just to allow her to use her hair. ¿ And guess who made it? Her husband. İnstead of just a helm, he crafted a complete suit of plate armor, fully decorated and lacquered. İn the nape of the helm was attached a kind of net/sleeve made of metal plates interlocked with chainmail articulations covered with metal scales, so she could put her hair inside it to prevent her hair from being cut in combat. This net/sleeve was open in the end to allow her manipulation/weapon wielding/spiked weight use.

One day, Kryziomar’s wagon was ambushed. So Kryziomar and the other men took the weapons in the wagon. Kryziomar used a two-handed double-edged sword w/ a libre-design handle (see the “Literary Shared Libraries” section in the Volume Zero/0) in one hand and a long parrying double-edged dagger w/ a libre-design handle in the other hand. He killed three men in the ambush. İt was a decisive victory.

The Kuloshian Empire tried to make a last desperate offensive against the Vlaosian Empire, so Rapunzel fought by the forces to defend the Vlaosian Empire. Later the Kuloshian forces were defeated.

One day, after an offensive, she saw a Kuloshian girl that asked:

[Girl]: ¿ Why U don’t cut short your hair and paint it blue?

[Rapunzel]: İ like this way, ginger and long.

Later, Rapunzel and Kryziomar brought a comfortable stone manor in a hill. They like to do the following play: she installed a metal structure in the roof. She climbed the roof ƒіst, so she wrapped her hair around the structure (she do it because the human neck bones haven’t the enough structure to hold other person’s weight) and released it over the roof and channeled the Vril in her hair to harden it. So Kryziomar climbed it by the outside and grabbed her hair and climbed in it to reach the roof. After that she released her hair to let it fly w/ the wind, and they see the sea at distance in the Full Moon nights in the manor’s roof.

The End

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Note: “Vril” is a homage to the book “Vril, the Power of the Coming Race”, by Edward Bulwer-Lytton.

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